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It took days to hollow out the soft parts
of the trunk, dig out the tree-flesh and sap,
polish the raw wood so that when he sat,
there would be no splinters. He carved his name
into the side, like a blessing, a declaration
of good fortune, and stowed his forest inside.
i don't know what this is

it may be part of a larger whole

or maybe it is just a small whole thing
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Given 2012-12-30
~ClioStorm creates a beautiful image with simple language in tree, fiddler crab. ( Suggested by 0hgravity and Featured by neurotype )
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gummyrabbit Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Student Writer
I like your description in the artist's comment part.
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ClioStorm Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Student Writer
haha thank you :D :heart:
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anapests-and-ink Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I keep coming back to this, trying to find the right words to say, but I'm still speechless.
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pakuuna Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
This is a beautiful poem, truly breathtaking! And the title sounds like a line from the TV show Supernatural:)
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ClioStorm Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Student Writer
Oh gosh, I was hoping no-one would notice... Yeah, I stole the title straight out of Supernatural. It was supposed to be a place-holder but then it just kind of stuck... I think it suits the poem, though. Thank you! :heart:
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MickeyFebruary Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Student Writer
As part of a whole or a whole itself, I think it is great either way. The imagery and feeling this small poem transfers is beautiful.
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ClioStorm Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Student Writer
:heart: thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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Karinta Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Student General Artist
It seems like a small whole thing to me. A flawless thing.
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ClioStorm Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Student Writer
:heart: thank you
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Karinta Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Student General Artist
Aw, you're welcome.
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neurotype Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Personally I wouldn't add to this piece, but I think it would be nice as a series about things that people had put a lot of time and love into.
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ClioStorm Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Student Writer
Ooh, that's an interesting idea. Thank you! I may well try that this year :heart:
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neurotype Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:D
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TheGlassIris Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
"soft", "sap", "sat", "splinters", "side", "stowed" Every line has only one "s" word and I wonder if that's why this piece is so connected. Even the variation from monosyllables with "splinters" containing two "s" sounds works to shape the rhythm and then bring it back with "side" which is then baffled by the happy medium of "stowed". It's an interesting pattern. And I looked up "fiddler crab" on Google and the Wikipedia article mentioned,

"Found in mangroves, in salt marshes, and on sandy or muddy beaches of West Africa, the Western Atlantic, the Eastern Pacific and the Indo-Pacific, fiddler crabs are easily recognized by their distinctively asymmetric claws."

"The movement of the smaller claw from ground to mouth during feeding underlines the crabs' common name; it looks as if the animal were playing the larger claw like a fiddle."

I'm wondering if the title of this poem, "tree, fiddler crab", is not an attempt to answer the question "if maybe a part of a larger whole, or maybe just a small whole thing."
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Minkymy Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
What a wonderful thing
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ClioStorm Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Student Writer
:heart: thank you
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Minkymy Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013
You're very welcome~
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AMWeitz Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Student Writer
It functions brilliantly as a small whole, but if you wanted to expand on it I'm sure you'd do a wonderful job. I love this. Simple, and it connects in a light but definite way to a deeper part of me. I love tree-flesh, which is funny because flesh is my least favorite word but you've made it beautiful. :heart:
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thetaoofchaos Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012   Writer
Wonderful descriptions! Congratulations on the feature!
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ClioStorm Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Student Writer
:heart: thank you!
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pomohippie7 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012   Writer
Congratulations on a well deserved DD! :clap:
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ClioStorm Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Student Writer
thanks! :heart:
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pomohippie7 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013   Writer
You're welcome. :)
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the well deserved DD! :heart:
Have a nice day and Happy New Year! :holly:
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ClioStorm Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Student Writer
:heart: thank you!
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure :happybounce:
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IyraEMM Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
this is so stunning!
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ClioStorm Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Student Writer
:heart: thanks
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IyraEMM Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
welcome :)
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Narcaholic Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Student
Beautiful imagery :heart:
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ClioStorm Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Student Writer
:heart: thank you
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FlightoftheMoon Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
It reminds me of The Giving Tree.
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silvernium Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Pretty. Lovely. Congratulations on your DD :)
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ClioStorm Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Student Writer
thank you :heart:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012   General Artist
Congratulations on the DD, darling lady! :love:
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ClioStorm Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Student Writer
thank you! :D :heart:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013   General Artist
Surely! :heart: :heart: :heart:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
Absolutely lovely, dear - congratulations! <3
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ClioStorm Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Student Writer
:heart: thank you!
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archelyxs Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
Succinct, stunning and lovely. Terrific work! Congrats on your DD, it is well-deserved! :hug:
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ClioStorm Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Student Writer
thank you, lovely! :heart:
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2012
Love. Feels like a Yeats Piece. Congratulations on your D.D!
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pagan-poetess Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Professional Writer
stunning imagery :heart:
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ClioStorm Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Student Writer
thank you :heart:
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pagan-poetess Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Professional Writer
you're very welcome :)
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cality Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Even if you decide it's a small whole thing, it's quite lovely. I love the sound of 'sap' followed by 'sat' at the end of the next line. :heart:
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